Summers coming to a end

-and the living hell of school is dawning -.-

man i hope this year will not be as drama packed as it was last year, i almost got into a fight with a cupple guys for pissing me off. lol it was funny as hell, i had a number of people laughing there asses off at them. the dumb guys took my book from me in the middle of class and put it in the open window and almost pushed it out. so i get up and grab the book and bash the dumby right in the head with it, broke the binding of the book too, and then i went to my see and threw it at him. man did it make a satisfying thud. and all the while the teacher was looking at me with a "wtf are you doing" look, but didn't say a thing to me. i guess the look on my face scared the teacher lol.
i got in a fight with a few of my frinds, and one of my best freinds. man what a nightmare that was. it was all just a big misunderstanding. and all i did was say some thing about this chick (cant stand her) that had the same name as my frind, and her lil cuz told her. and MAN, we didn't talk for like....a while. talk about having to appologise for some thing that wan't directed at the person, lol but its cool now and thank god it is, i don't want to go through that again -.-

okay lets get away from the hell of my story from last year....well i'm probly not going to be posting any art soon. with sucks like hell, yeah i'm going to try to actuly make a effort this year. i pass with all B's and a C last year, but.... i'm going to try and do things to the best that i can this year. lol. I'm still working on my story, i'm not quiting that. heck no, i love writing. but i do ne some crits, i'll post some thing i wrote for the bba forum at the bottom of this, and i wan't you to tell what i did wrong, or what i did right.

as for my characters and story ermmm well. i'm NOT doing any characters before i get a story that i like set in stone. I helped Howls-4-life with hers and that wen't really well so now i need to work on mine. i have a few ideas of what it will be about but those to are not set in stone but one is! it will be CougarsVSwolves idk but hay i liked it or this big ass dog breed vs wolves

but here is the post i need help with, give me crits

Hanging pale and weak over the horizon, the sun chiseled away at the night. Beginning at the far edges of the sky not seen from within the bounds of Inaria, and not stopping until the sun immersed the sky and the world bellow in a blistering blanket of golden light. The sun chased away the stars with ease, but still scraped along the edges of the havens trying to find hold. The air was warm and soothing; dawn had snuck its way into the heart of the wolf pack territory. The sky was beginning to light up in a mix of colors...pink, orange, gold... The first rays of light began dancing on and around the canopy over head and sparkled in the dew that clung to each leaf. A calm breeze swept though the air, rustling her creamy fur. Theore closed her lavender eyes and slowly lifted her nose into the air.

The breeze swarmed around her blackened face The tall grass gleamed in the suns rays, the night dew still clung to each blade of grass.

Its not done, but i just need to know what you think so far.